This post is similar to one I recently wrote called Basic Tips for Writing Dialogue, but being able to write good dialogue is a crucial element to readers liking your book and coming back for more. Therefore, I am of the mind-set that you cannot read too many tips about dialogue. Ergo…
1. Don’t use dialogue tags after every line of dialogue.
If you do this, your scene will be repetitive and boring. Trust that readers will be able to follow along, and if you’re unsure, try reading the scene out loud to someone else. See if they can follow the dialogue and know who’s speaking.
2. Don’t get too creative.
So many people think “said” is boring, so they try to get creative and use other words. Creativity is great, but when it comes to dialogue tags, creativity can hurt you. Think of “said” like an invisible tag. Readers basically skip over it. But using words like demanded, stated, cried, laugh, ejaculated (<–I hate that one), you are drawing attention to the tags themselves instead of letting the dialogue stand on its own. Which brings me to point #3:
3. Don’t use a tag when the dialogue can speak for itself.
You shouldn’t have to use an adverb like “she said angrily” or “she replied sarcastically.” When you use adverbs in your dialogue tag, you’re not trusting the dialogue to speak for itself. As the author, you should have written the dialogue well enough that it should sound angry or sarcastic to the reader without you adding in the adverb to tell us that character is angry or sarcastic. Of course, sometimes these words work well and should be used, but in many case I end up removing them because they aren’t necessary. (This is where a critique partner, beta reader, or editor can come in handy.)
4. Don’t use tags that don’t relate to actual speaking (see also this post)
Something I see a lot is use of words in place of “said” that aren’t physically possible in dialogue. For example:
“You can’t be serious,” I blurted.
“That’s hilarious,” I laughed.
“I can’t stop laughing,” I snorted.
None of these tags are correct, because you cannot laugh a sentence or blurt a sentence or snort a sentence. You say something THEN you laugh. You say something THEN you snort. And I wouldn’t recommend ever using the word blurt like this at all.
The proper punctuation here would be: “That’s hilarious.” I laughed. OR, you could do this: “That’s hilarious,” I said, laughing. The second use is still strange, and I recommend the first revision (I laughed with a period), but it’s at least better than the original.
5. Don’t use two dialogue tags.
This one is similar to #1 and sounds like a ridiculous problem. And I agree! But I’ve seen things like this happen, so I want to address it:
Charlie smiled. “I’m here to work,” Charlie said.
While this isn’t technically wrong, it certainly isn’t advisable. There’s no need to double up on tags or action beats. That just adds unnecessary word count and is a great way to turn readers off to your writing.
Did I miss anything? What other “don’ts” of dialogue would you recommend?